Friday, July 4, 2008
She is a Woman .......
Ever felt perplexed what is she up to?
When she gets mad and yells at you..
Cries for no reason and doesnt give a clue,
She wants you to say that I love You...
She needs to be cared ,
She needs to be loved,
Sometimes behaves a kid,
She needs to be pampered...
She fights with you to prove her right,
But she cant let you be wrong in others sight..
She loves you without imposing any condition,
She thinks of you as her final destination..
When she asks you a question again n again,
Do you really love me or its no more the same?
You think she doesnt trust you and scold her tight,
Actually She needs you to hold her tight..
She feels so secure when you are around,
Alone gets scared even by slightest sound..
With you she can tackle toughest of times
You make her complete like ending note of rhymes..
You crib that she doesn't use her brain,
Gets so emmotional takes unneccessary pain..
She does like that to make you feel proud..
She has the calibre but doesnt show it aloud..
She needs you to make her silliest of decisions,
She feels proud having you in her possessions...
Her love is pure without any calculation,
You are the one who brings her determination...
When you lie and think she fell for it,
She knows everything but still doesnt lit..
She waits for you to tell the fact,
She knows the best way how to tact...
She needs your commitment for life long,
Doesnot really like when you just play around...
Love her truely she will be with you along,
Give her the trust in relation which she never found...
She will cry, laugh, love and care,
She is a woman, please treat her fair...
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6 comments:
That is really awesome... I talks more about your character Jyo.. you have become a great poet.. rather a lyricist I wud day.. Keep posting all you ur good work for us all..
This one really touches my heart...
I am able to link myself with this poem...
yea that's what a woman wants from her beloved
This reflects you jyoti ...
Your commitment,your love, care, is really admirable..
Very good..
you again touched my heart with your poem as you always do
A very nice poem indeed.
Nice use of Rhymes and a very beautiful start.
I specially liked the stranza "When you lie and think she fell for it,
She knows ............".
Kudos to you for the the way you presented the subtle and unspoken realities of a relationship. But Enough of praises now.
The second stranza was not rhyming with the WHole poem and the 4th stranza reminded me of start. Sorry for being so critical but can't help ;)
Also the whole poem lacked to emphasize one point. It tells you to love, care, forgive, etc. but did not tell us(I mean Guys ;)) to respect a woman.
I would have loved the last line if you removed the "Please".
I m prabhakaran's friend happen to see your blog via testimonial stuff. The poem "she is a woman" is too good. I ask my brother to use in his film or i ll use it n any of my short film. Don't worry with your permission :)
Excellent Poem....
i am blogrolling your blog...
Keep blogging...God bless you...
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